Welcome to DJK's Fantasy World where I'll be building different models for table top role play games and discussing my writing, including my novels based on the very first fantasy character I played. The models are made from recycled materials where possible, although various commercially purchased products will also be used and discussed.
I'll also throw in the occasional book and theatre reviews, you can't beat live performance. Plus my Dr Who tapestry progress.
Tuesday, 17 June 2014
Gag Reel and Fight Director
Trapped in Karl's dungeon whilst editing book three
I’m now in full edit mode for book 3 of Karl’s trilogy,
which is keeping me from the model table at the moment. There are three parts
to the final book, and part one has come back from the read through crew and
the proof reader along with a selection of comments. Despite my own initial
attack at the printed page with a red pen there have still been some
interesting typos that have come to light.
This has got me thinking, maybe on
here or on Karl’s Facebook page I might present a book’s equivalent of a Gag
Reel that features on the extra’s of many TV boxsets. It’s amazing just how one missing letter can
change the meaning of a sentence and since the word is genuine it would not be
picked up by a spell checker.
Just one example of an edit found in book 3, and I’m picking
this one since it does not give any spoilers away.
“...whilst the surrounding buildings had been allowed to
gather the grim of years.”
Guess what TV series I might have been watching recently?
This is just one; others have raised even my eyebrows when I
Old way with figures.
The other area of note is the rewrite of the last
chapter. Initial feeling was that the
final battle didn't quite give it enough punch.
Reading a fight or battle in a novel is not the same as watching it on
screen. Several blows get traded on the screen
quickly and the action moves fast, but different camera angles and fast cuts
making each move fresh and exciting. In a book a detailed blow by blow account would
become quite monotonous even with the aid of a brilliant thesaurus. Now in the past I have used some of the models
and lead figures to block the movements of characters before committing pen to
paper. However in this instance I needed to go further afield and call in the
help of an expert.
Yes, in the credits of this book there is now a Fight
I’m not going into the details
of who is fighting who, since that would give much of the story away. But I
required a bit more guidance on how the fight could work since I had armed my
characters with an eclectic collection of weapons, which did not make the fight
technically easy to choreograph so that it would be believable. However I am now certain that with the help
of Andy this finally works and the conclusion to the adventure is far better
than it would otherwise have been.
So allow me to introduce my Fight Director, Andrew Ashenden.
He has devised fights for tv and stage and taught in several prestigious drama
schools, but he had to admit this was the first time he had been asked to help
with a fight scene for a novel.
Notice I said novel and not book, since he has also written
two books on the subject of stage combat.